I’m going to talk about my grandfather, he is a
very good man and for me is my example to follow. Firstly, He always was
hardworking. When he was a child he gone alone to school, only because all
others children did that, then he worked in a mine and he was called “The
good man” I believe that for his personality. Secondly, He is the most kindly, for example, when my mother was a college student, he every morning leaves her
breakfast in a tray in the kitchen and he paid the first part of my apartment
without asking for the reward. Also, He is so protective because now he has alzherimer, but the only one
thing that he hardly ever forget is the name of my grandmother, is his only
preoccupation. Where is she? he asks. He gives to her his food, he do all that my
grandmother wants him to do. He gives much love and kisses to her. For his effort, his generosity, and
his devotion for the people, he is my example to follow.
Hello Rocio it seems that you love so much your grandfather, as i can see in your words he is a great person and human you must be proud of he, thank you for share this words with the classmates.
ResponderEliminarregards!
hi rocío, your grandfather seems to be a very good person, and a exemplar human being.
ResponderEliminarYou paragraphs were very clear to read and the order of ideas too.
Rocío,
ResponderEliminarThanks for sharing that. Your structure is OK, you should make a distinction between "example" and "explanation".
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TS: My grandfather [he] is a very good man and for me [is my] AND AN example to follow.
SS1: Firstly, He always was hardworking.
EXP.: When he was a child he [gone alone] WENT to school ALONE? FOR HIS OWN INITIATIVE?, only because all other[s] children did that,
SS2: then he worked in a mine and he was called “The good man”
EXP.:I believe that for his personality.
SS2: Secondly, He is the most kind[ly] KINDEST PERSON?,
EXPLANATION? NOT EXAMPLE:for example, when my mother was a college student, he 2) every morning [leaves] 1)LEFT her breakfast [i]On a tray in the kitchen and
EX: he paid the first part of my apartment without asking for the [reward] MONEY? ASKING TO PAY HIM BACK?.
SS3: Also, He is so protective because now he has [alzherimer] ALZHEIMER'S DISEASE, but the only one thing that he hardly ever forgetS is the name of my grandmother,
EXP.: SHE is his only preoccupation. Where is she? he asks.
EXP.: He gives 2)to her 1) his food, he doES [all] EVERYTHING that my grandmother wants him to do.
EXP: He gives much love and kisses to her.
c: For his effort, his generosity, and his devotion for the people, he is my example to follow.