martes, 25 de octubre de 2016

My Best Holydays

Is a little difficult for me choose only one vacations, because in all vacations i do very similar
 things. But if I got to choose only one I choose my vacations in Algarrobo.

Algarrobo is a little beach, near to my city Santiago. For this reason, the travel is short time.
The things that I like more, is that there goes my family, and this has been since before I born.
The history of vacations in Algarrobo begin with my uncles.
My aunt's husband had a Little house in form of A. but the home was so little for many people
that went there, so after they get married, and then they build their own house opposite the
 other old house (  That is the home that I actually  go), and all summers they go with more
 uncles and my cousins.


Personally, I adore stay in the beach, I can stay all day between swim in the sea and lean back under the 
sun and play pallets. in some places of the beach of Algarrobo there are not limits for swimmers, so I can
 swim until the boats!

Well, other reason is that I meet with many funny people there, I have neighbors, friends of the beach,  
 friends of my school that have houses there! So hardly ever I´m alone. In general with this persons we
 went out in the nights to  craft fairs ,  we sang songs with a guitar ,we play cards or dudo and we speak 
about our stories that we live in the last year.

I think that my best vacations is not something amagazine or “how in dreams” , but for me to
share with people that make you happy and you love them, and besides stay in the beach, the
 mix of this thigns become in my best holydays.


3 comentarios:

  1. hi rocío, algarrobo is a very nice place to visit, and it seems that you love it.
    i found an error in your post: when you said "Algarrobo is a little beach, near to me city Santiago.", you should said "near to MY city".

    that´s all and i hope you can go to algarrobo many more times for the rest of your life

    see you!

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  2. IT Is a little difficult for me choose only [one=SINGULAR] [vacations=PLURAL], because in all vacations i do very similar
    things. But if I got to choose only one I choose my vacations in Algarrobo. (TS??)

    Algarrobo is a little beach, near to my city Santiago. For this reason, the [travel] TRIP is short (time.) (EXPLANATION)
    The things that I like (more) THE MOST, is that 3) there 2) goes 1) my family, and this has been since before I WAS born. (EXPLANATION)
    The history of vacations in Algarrobo beginS with my uncles. (EXAMPLE??) (SS1)
    My aunt's husband had a Little house in form of A. but the home was so little for many people
    that went there, so after they (get) GOT married, (and then) they builT(d) their own house opposite the other old house ( That is the home that I actually go TO), and all summers they (WHO ARE THEY?) go with more uncles and my cousins. (AUNTS??) EXPLANATION
    Personally, I adore TO stay in the beach, (SS2)
    I can stay all day between swimMING in the sea and leanING back under the sun and play [pallets]. in some places of the beach of Algarrobo there are not limits for swimmers, so I can swim AS FAR AS (until) the boats! (??)
    Well, ANother reason is that I meet with many funny people there, (SS 3)
    I have neighbors, friends of the beach, friends of my school that have houses there! So hardly ever I´m alone. In general with [this persons] THESE PEOPLE we [went] GO out in the nights to craft fairs , we sI(a)ng songs with a guitar ,we play cards or dudo and we speak about our stories that we liveD in the last year. (EXPLANATION)
    I think that my best vacations is not something [“amagazine”???] or “how in dreams” , but for me to share with people that make you happy and you love them, and besides stay in the beach, the mix of this [thigns] become in my best [holydays]. (CONCLUDING SENTENCE)

    Rocío,
    Your text is very hard to read as you made so many mistakes. You should edit your text in a much better way: some grammar and spelling mistakes are simply not acceptable. You hardly used the paragraph structure from the class. The reader doesn’t have to make an effort to understand. The Topic sentence not very clear. Please check word order. Never write a verb without a subject, as indicated in class many times.

    Cheers,

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